Need assistance with making edits based on tutors response. Essay has been reviewed and revised by schools tutor and just need help applying the edits. All sources are already here, unless you want to add additional that you find valuable, and the comments/edits needed are short and specific.
The two main reason I chose to write about was: No-fault divorce law and cohabitation has become more acceptable. Therefore, I need someone to strengthen the points outlined here so that it is clear that they contribute to the rise in divorce rates.
I attached two different reviews from tutor individual tutors, use them as a guide please.
Here’s some update from the professor
The first effect can work, but I think you can be more specific. What year exactly was the “no fault” introduced? Then, you can start to compare the numbers of before and after.
The second effect is good as well, yes. But again, specific will always win. How much higher is the divorce rate when people live together first?